Body Language Blogfest: Iron Food
Author: Anastasia V. Pergakis // Category: "The Faery's Tale", Blogfests
Yes, the day is finally here! I have to say I scrambled to put my own entry together! I know, I'm terrible! I almost missed my own blogfest!
Anyway, don't forget to check out the other entries! I'm sure they are great!
Here is mine - I had to take out the dialogue and edit the scene a bit for this - so let me know if you think it works this way or not.
(Etharas is tied to an iron stake in a tent)
He kicked himself again. If he had been able to stay alert, they would not have been captured. Drache would have found them with the grenan leaves and Letarri certainly would be fine. He had no way of knowing if she was still alive or not and without his powers, he could not find out. He thought about fighting against the iron and trying anyway, at least to gain knowledge of her well being. He shook his head. He could die trying making it a wasted effort.
Sefiya entered the tent with another tray in her hands. She set it on the ground next to Etharas. She filled the spoon and held it up to his lips.
He quirked an eybrow at her in question. She nodded. He rolled his eyes and turned away from her. He heard the spoon clank to the tray and he turned to look at her again. Her arms were crossed over her chest and she looked at him in question. Would he eat or not? He wished he could but the iron made his stomach roll.
She lowered her gaze and played with the poon. She looked back at him, her eyes gentle, and for a moment Etharas thought she would untie him. She raised a glass of water to his lips. He gazed at her over the brim of the cup, trying to read her face. She must have changed her mind about untying him as her eyes hardened once again and she left the tent. He sighed and wished he could have a real drink. At least it would ease his head ache.
So there you go, my scene! It did have a bit of dialogue the original way, but I sort of like it this way! I might leave it!
Anyway, don't forget to check out the other entries! I'm sure they are great!
Here is mine - I had to take out the dialogue and edit the scene a bit for this - so let me know if you think it works this way or not.
(Etharas is tied to an iron stake in a tent)
He kicked himself again. If he had been able to stay alert, they would not have been captured. Drache would have found them with the grenan leaves and Letarri certainly would be fine. He had no way of knowing if she was still alive or not and without his powers, he could not find out. He thought about fighting against the iron and trying anyway, at least to gain knowledge of her well being. He shook his head. He could die trying making it a wasted effort.
Sefiya entered the tent with another tray in her hands. She set it on the ground next to Etharas. She filled the spoon and held it up to his lips.
He quirked an eybrow at her in question. She nodded. He rolled his eyes and turned away from her. He heard the spoon clank to the tray and he turned to look at her again. Her arms were crossed over her chest and she looked at him in question. Would he eat or not? He wished he could but the iron made his stomach roll.
She lowered her gaze and played with the poon. She looked back at him, her eyes gentle, and for a moment Etharas thought she would untie him. She raised a glass of water to his lips. He gazed at her over the brim of the cup, trying to read her face. She must have changed her mind about untying him as her eyes hardened once again and she left the tent. He sighed and wished he could have a real drink. At least it would ease his head ache.
So there you go, my scene! It did have a bit of dialogue the original way, but I sort of like it this way! I might leave it!
Oh! How did they get caught? I love this story by the way. Great job with the scene.
Thanks again for hosting the blogfest. I hope things smooth out with your enlisting venture.
Good scene! And thanks for hosting the blogfest. It was fun! :) Is he a faerie? I can't think of any other mythological creature that gets sick from iron. But I could be way off. lol
Nice post.
What I want to know is...
How does this show posted on Saturday the 24th but I didn't see it till today, Monday the 26th. Magick?
What the...she's playing with the poon? Now that's some body language!
ROTFLMAO!
Other than that...pretty good!
HHAHA! That's supposed to be Spoon! *hangs head in shame* LOL
Great scene!
I can't believe I missed this! I completely forgot about it. *facedesk*